Wednesday, September 2, 2015

Summary and Response to Bully Drake and LinZi

Bully Summary and Response by Drake H. and LinZi F.
September 2, 2015
English 9 Honors
Summary :
  •  Topic Sentence:  The movie “Bully” by Lee Hirsch identifies the impact on how people view themselves and the world.

  •  Supporting detail and explanation of ideas to prove main point: The victims in “Bully” were suicidal and depressed because  their normal day would include being physically and verbally abused. The world to them was not fair but they knew nothing else than abuse to they endured it. The reason that they had these problems with depression and suicide was because they did not understand why they should live. Life for them was hell, so why endure it?
  • Concluding sentence: Bullying has an impact on people's view on life.
Response:
  • Topic sentence:   The movie “Bully” by Lee Hirsch correctly portrays that bullying is a problem in schools.

  • Claim 1: Kids are bullied because they are too kind and loving to retaliate. They endure it because they believe that they can be better than their aggressors.
  • Set up:
  • Quote: Alex Libby’s dad recounts Alex saying, “I want to be the bigger man” (Hirsch).
  • Quote explanation: Alex’s father is talking about how Alex overflowed with love. He could never hurt anyone else the way that they hurt him. Alex was always striving to be better than the bullies.
  • Tie in: Today, we are left with a choice. We can choose to be scum or we can choose to do the right thing. Alex did not allow jealousy, betrayal, pride, prejudice, and power to rule his choices. We need to model decisions after his  to make the right decisions.

Counterclaim:
  • Counterclaim: However, kids are bullied because they are afraid to stand up to their aggressors.
  • Set up: People are not born with massive amounts of courage.
  • Quote: “Stand up for yourself because if not people start seeing you as a punching bag and no one respects a punching bag” (Mr. Libby)
  • Quote explanation: Alex convinces himself that the kids are just “messing around and having fun”. His father explains to him that he needs to stand up for himself instead of letting them bully him.
  • Tie in: Knowing this we need to stand up for ourselves and demand respect so that we are not victimized.




Rebuttal progression:

1st step:A common view of bullying is that many kids have a choice over whether or not they are bullied and can stand up to their aggressors.


2nd step:This seems reasonable because people do need to stand up for themselves. "If you don't stand up for yourself people start to see you as a punching bag and no one respects a punching bag." (Mr. Libby)

3rd step:However, it’s more complicated than that because people don’t always have a choice. If it is one against 5 it is not fair. There is nothing they can do except turn the other cheek. They also might not retaliate because they believe that they can be better than the bullies.

1 comment:

  1. Good start to your summary- make sure to attribute ideas back to the director/author and keep from using opinion words/phrases.

    Good topic sentence for your response other than needing a why to it. Good work on your claim. Make sure to use those same elements in your counterclaim: set-up, lead in, proper citations (Hirsch)

    Where is your rebuttal progression or conclusion? Can you post this in outline format next time not paragraph form?

    Redo

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